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Originally Posted by catman  Sorry, but the main characters nauseating self description lost me at the second paragraph... This man has NO weaknesses? No doubts? Sounds like a screaming narcisist... I didn[t get to where he described his penis- but from the first paragraph I am guessing what..20 inches? and um....10 inches around?
"I’m like a male Helen of Troy. I’m a caricature of male perfection: hugely broad shoulders, narrow waist, perfectly formed ass, well-defined back and so on. " Wasn't this guy on Melrose place or some other vacuous show?
(you wanted feedback....just putting in my .02- its rare that I find a 'fuck story' that much of a turn off... but blech...) |
if you didn't read it, why jump to conclusions about the story??
I won't ruin it for anyone but suffice to say catman, you completely missed the complication/crisis for the main character on which this first episode of the story hinges.
And for the author, great story, creatively thought out and well written. 9/10 (you won't get the other tenth until you write some more
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