I respect the author's right to write about whatever he wants, even if it's not my thing (I've explained it, by the way), but what shocks me in this story is that Gonad applied himself to make us hate the protagonist...

Which may be writer's trick or technique in its own right, but doesn't compel anyone to read on. I had to force myself to get through even such a short piece. This author should probably be well advised to change that if he wants readers, especially if he undertakes something longer.

In any case, I doubt that this story or any such story has its place on this website (although I wouldn't know, since I'm not an administrator or anything), because, hell, let's face it, we only want to jerk off in this section !