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Originally Posted by legaleagel  As always I loved it Aliensrus. If I have one minor criticism I felt the ending was maybe a bit rushed. I'd have loved more details of Mark's encounters with the school nurse or the daughter. Maybe some stuff from the hospital as they give birth.
However msot of all I'd just like to say thankyou for another wonderful story. I'm really looking forwrad to the next one. |
Legaleagel,
You might be right about the rushed part. I really felt like Doug in the end, wondering when everyone was going to sleep. I could have filled in more detail, flashback scenes, etc but I had a definite theme in mind, Doug's comeuppance, and I guess I thought he'd suffered enough.
As I told Millionman, you might want to try it out yourself, writing about the school nurse and the daughter. I alluded to a lot of sexual adventures that the teenager had but you can fill those in. You were talking about giving this a try in a thread somewhere around here. Feel free to give it a try with my characters or make some of your own.
I have no intention of writing another story unless I get hit with writer's block again. These stories do get me through some miserable bouts. And I never say never...
Thanks again,
A.