I couldn't disagree more with SpoiledPrincess. I think it's absolutely clear what you're setting up, and I couldn't be enjoying it more. Having him narrate his own comeuppance is a fine approach and it is working well. I believe that SP's aversion to the story has more to do with her disconnecting from the theme altogether, as opposed to flawed technique or character development.

Keep it up - it's going wonderfully.