Hey Sizemic,

Nice work.

I have tried my hand at a couple of stories too. It's not until you try to write a hot story about the adventures with a large penis for the LPSG site that you realize it isn't so easy. this site is called a 'support group' so we can give each other ideas feedback and support. I liked "Joe Feels Invisible" and will offer some comments.

Any feedback you can offer on my attempts at fiction located elsewhere on this site would be welcome too!

My first reaction is in response to your question about length of the story. In my opinion your story isn't 'too long'. Maybe I'm a wordy person, but I like the building up of the characters and description of the surroundings to give the story line some context.

I like the set-up for the main character -- Joe -- wishing to be invisible.

I don't know the proper literary term, but I like your set-up of the teenage angst. The character feels so shy and full of teenage doubt that he wishes he could be invisible. Ironically, once he gets his wish the reader can anticipate the growing sense of power and confidence that will come from this new power.

The being invisible theme has lots of potential. I'd encourage you to keep going.

We all appreciate feedback and positive re-enforcement. I like heterosexual themes and well endowed men satisfying women. That's why I like this story. I think you can take it in lots of directions as the character builds confidence. I'm not into violence or anything too weird, but with fiction writing you can push the margins a little. After all, becoming invisible isn't exactly 'realistic'.

The powers of being invisible give Joe some opportunity to experiment and explore -- he can satisfy himself and satisfy others with his cock. As he gains confidence, more discription of his cock and his sexual prowess would be good.

Not everyone likes the same type of writing, but we are all on this site because we like the subject of large penises -- hence the name of the site! Descriptions of the sex scenes and how Joe's large penis gets into interesting situations because of his ability to turn invisible and re-appear will be very exciting.

So long as you don't wonder too far from the large penis theme you will have a faithful readership on this site!

Keep going