A story of Richard Part 1

Don't listen to the naysayers, of which there are an endless supply in all parts of life. Funny how those who complain return to read each installment... I think if anything the age of Richard is the most salient and unique part of the story.

Anyway, I'm a fan, and I'm glad you haven't stopped!

I love your story and writting style. Personally the age thing is not an issue for me. I had completely forgot that the protaganist was 13, and had to go back to discover the "so called" controversy.

Change the age at the start if you must, but please don't stop writting the story. I not reading this story because of age, I am reading because your characters are hot. Thanks.

It's a well written story, but in regards to literary technique it's usually important to make sure your details and characters are BELIEVABLE. This story loses any credibility, even as fantasy, when the main character is 13 years old and "developed" in the manner he is. It's not plausible even in a fantastic realm.

awesome story, and like others have said, dont worry, taboo isnt worried too much here. anyway i just wanted to define fantasy from dictionary.com....
fan‧ta‧sy 

–noun 1.imagination, esp. when extravagant and unrestrained. 2.the forming of mental images, esp. wondrous or strange fancies; imaginative conceptualizing. 3.a mental image, esp. when unreal or fantastic; vision

It fits those descriptions and so much more...good job!
(PS~sorry if i come across as an ass, millionman...but i can be so oh well)

Stmonkey, Sure you can post the definition of the word fantasy, but it's a bit more complex than mere fantasy. The story isn't being told as if it were fantastic, it's based in a realistic setting. In MOST gigantic sized penis stories or overly muscular and big breast stories don't have this sort of tone. They are written with a bit more of the fantastic because the characters are bigger than life, go back and read Richard O'Steele's stories and you'll see where I'm coming from. The biggest, and probably only issue, is the age discrepancy and the development of this BOY. If it's set in a realistic place with non-fantastic characters then it goes beyond fantasy into the absurd. If you're reading a fantasy story then normally all of the characters are just that.

*humbled*
Touché

Thanks for all the comments, positive and negative.

My opinion (like the author would have one) is that this is a fantasy. It's a lot more "out there" than some of the other stories I've read here. But it is a fantasy. Location has nothing to do with it. If you take some popular movies lately, Superman and Men In Black for example, were all pure fantasy. All took place in realistic settings though. You don't need a "Middle Earth" for a story to be fantasy.

All of the characters in the story are fantasy. Oddly, the main character is based on a friend from grammar school that did have precocious puberty so he had a muscular physique very early. In junior high, he had the largest genitalia but since everyone else was in junior high, that probably didn't say much. He also had a girlfriend (the only one of my friends who had a girlfriend at that time) who was beautiful and, as I recall, was a year older.

I'm sure these days, he's probably short (the downside of precocious puberty is you don't grow much) and squat with an average endowment for an adult.

And let's face some facts here. All the stories here are fantasy. Anyone with a rudimentary knowledge of hydraullics and cylindrical volumes knows that to pump enough blood to fill the horse-sized dicks in these stories would require a horse-sized cardiac system.

So, just enjoy the story or stop reading it. I'll probably finish it in two more posts, than I'll try to move on to another story, something closer to "My Brother's Wife", that won't generate so much mixed reaction.

Aliensrus.

Personally I AM enjoying the story, but the age issue is at the front of my mind in ALL of these situations.

That's what I love about this site -- we are actually having a debate about a fucking sex story (fantasy or not) and the debate is getting somewhat close to a literary debate.

I have tried my hand at a couple of these types of stories and know they take considerable work to think through and develop and then post. If our colleagues take some time to offer constructive criticism or "literary" feedback I think that is terrific.

Feedback and commentary is great. I think of it as part of the "support" in the web site name: L.P.S.G.

Having said all of that, I dismiss the age thing. The descriptions of the character, his body, his thinking and the way the women are reacting to him doesn't in any way point toward pedophelia or anything like that -- in fact it is the exact opposite. If there was the slightest hint of that stuff I too would be outraged and ask that the post be pulled.

As a matter of personal taste, I am more creeped out by the mother daughter sharing thing. I find that disturbing, but maybe it is just me.

In any event, the writing is good and the sexual tension keeps me reading. I hope You literary critics will offer me some constructive feedback as I keep trying to develop my writing skills.

JJ

Is there ever going to be more of this story? I really liked it. Hopefully aliensrus wasn't put off by the negative comments. Please write some more!

I have no intention of finishing this story. Some liked it a lot, some hated it.

The issue came down to either too much fantasy or the mix of fantasy and reality. As I explained earlier though, my childhood experience gave me encounters with two pre-teen lotharios. Recently, I double checked with a junior high school friend who recalled things the way I did. (I thought I was fantasizing the stuff) Turns out, it was unusual for most people. So I got lucky or unlucky since it affected my relationships later.

Nevertheless though, the Richard story is a fantasy, even more so now that I know my experience was so unusual.

I have other stories here. I may write more. In fact, I may do a story from the opposite end of the age spectrum. Thinking about it anyway.

A.

Thanks for the response. I understand where you're coming from, but I hope you'll reconsider finishing it in the future. Keep up the good work.