actually you brought up a wonderfully valid point that i've unfortunately procrastinated against. my ideas come and go in bursts so when i start writing i'm only concerned with getting as many words down as possible, i was going to save all the spacing for later, as long as i know the chapters are similar in length. as far as the excerpts, i actually sacrificed chronology for drama. instead of picking out a string of excerpts that made sense, i was looking for passages with oh-my-god-he's-turning-gay tones, drama i guess you'd call it. honestly i didn't think this many people would be reading this but since you guys are taking the time to i guess i owe you better. unfortunately i can't close the thread and start from scratch, but as soon as i make it through the passage i'm working on, i'm going to start back at posting from chapter 1 and try to make a lil more sense. i dunno if i said this already, but until this year my life has been songs and poems, so the whole novel thing is more of a touch-and-go sorta thing, i'm an amateur. but i'm glad you took the time to point out some pretty bad "behavior" on my part. i never considered that posting it unedited as i have been is probably visually unstimulating. call me anal-retentive but i think i'll ask a mod to close this so i can start all over with a more suitable format